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the last survivor

Discussion in 'Roleplay Planning' started by killerdude99999, Apr 30, 2014.

  1. killerdude99999

    killerdude99999 New Member

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    its was the night after my graduation of medical school then the news came up and they spotted a dozen of spaceships then they shot lasers missles my race was dying one ship landed i snuck in i grabed a sword slashed the captain and all the soldiers then i stole the ship and ran away then after i reached out the gravity field the whole planet blew up i was devistaded i was crying so much so i went hyperspeed to get away from all the horror then i ran out of fuel and i looked down i saw a planet with life (the rp planet) before i got down i looked in the storage and it was tons of weapons food and armor i wasnt supprised cause the ship was a terrerist ship i took some equipment and i beamed down.
     
  2. Pixel

    Pixel Captain Amurica

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    (nice, is this a journal.)
     
  3. killerdude99999

    killerdude99999 New Member

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    i could make it a journal but its just the first part of the rp life
     
  4. Mazékial

    Mazékial New Member

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    ((and the LAST know survivor stalks his prey in the night, and he's watchING US ALL WITH THE EYYYYYYYYYE...))

    ((Of the Tiger.))

    ((Condemnit now that son'g stuck in my head))
     
  5. MEAN GREEN BAD MACHINE

    MEAN GREEN BAD MACHINE Notorious B.A.D.

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  6. Punished Tacc

    Punished Tacc New Member

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    - 1 giant run on sentence
    - little to no punctuation
    - spelling errors
    - grammar mistakes left and right

    Check yoself before you wreck yoself.
     
  7. Pixel

    Pixel Captain Amurica

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  8. Punished Tacc

    Punished Tacc New Member

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    Wrong, the above is the correct criticism given.
     
  9. MasterGruntR75

    MasterGruntR75 New Member

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    One day I hope I can write with such skill.

    One day.
     
  10. Iridium616

    Iridium616 New Member

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    it is not that gud i can make better history i tell ya i can look one time some person entered on a facility and been experimented very very very evil and they laughed manically and it weree all evil because they were experimenting on that person so he died and his family was very sorry they wanted revenge and blew up the place destroying the whole earth cause the facility was very very big and all explosive.

    Learn from your master.